Luan Mao posted a comment on Saturday 18th December 2010 11:51pm
Interesting one-shot. If you can call 60K words a one-shot.
There wasn't much new for me in this story because I quite like "Harry wakes up" and "Harry gets fed up" stories and seek them out. Nevertheless I quite enjoyed this one. It's well written and you avoided the worst of the cliches.
One original feature: Harry vanquishing Voldemort in _Mortal Kombat_. Mmmm, nope. Don't think I've come across that one before. And Voldemort having made his first horcrux by mistake and later welcoming the reintegration of his soul fragments is new, at least to me.
I do think Harry should have beaten the Weasleys and the Order a bit more after he took ownership of the house. Maybe require them all to address him as Your Worshipfulness as a condition of using the house. Just because he no longer cares about much doesn't mean he can't take amusement where he can find it.
Quibble aside, it was a good story and I enjoyed reading it.
jilumasam posted a comment on Friday 17th December 2010 5:07am
chris7200 posted a comment on Friday 17th December 2010 4:58am
What a fantastic story! Loved, loved, loved the bit about Mortal Kombat. Thanks for the great read.
hordac85 posted a comment on Thursday 16th December 2010 11:02pm
Excellent! Keep it up!
Meteoricshipyards posted a comment on Thursday 16th December 2010 9:09pm
Loved the defeat of Voldemort. Rather unique, beating him at video games.
Sorry to see Luna fail Harry, too. Was happy that she and Neville found happiness together.
Mrs. Granger was great. Her teasing Hermione was very funny. Mr. Granger and the sandwich was good, too. The 'cuffs - not so much (shudder).
Nice happy ending.
Thank you for writing it.
00_Knight posted a comment on Thursday 16th December 2010 6:14pm
Great story Seel'vor!
Welcome to FFA!
sparrowphoenix posted a comment on Wednesday 15th December 2010 6:12pm
Absolutely wonderful. I wish I had found this sooner.
Keep up the wonderful work.
Mot70 posted a comment on Wednesday 15th December 2010 6:01pm
> Is it a one-short short? Is it a novel? No...
Is it a well-crafted story? Absolutely! Thanks for sharing!
Darryn posted a comment on Wednesday 15th December 2010 12:20pm
A well written Harry who doesn't care, nice. Loved the mortal kombat challenge :)
gadriam posted a comment on Wednesday 15th December 2010 9:36am
Magnificent. Brilliant! All in all, pretty damn good.
There was a lot of guesswork to do regarding Harry's original behaviour and Tom's change of heart, but i think i worked it out. This is a story to return to, i think. Those are quite rare.
Mistress of Potions posted a comment on Wednesday 15th December 2010 2:32am
Thank you for a particularly well written story.