Tenchifew posted a comment on Tuesday 26th July 2011 3:58am for OWtGoT I: Harry James Potter
Very very nice short story. I like your Harry. Thank you for writing.
normalguycap posted a comment on Wednesday 15th December 2010 6:15pm for OWtGoT I: Harry James Potter
I enjoy your descriptive prowess especially about Harry and gaining his power. However, the story took on a dramatically different tone when H/HR got back to Dumbledore's office. A radical change. Since its like a once shot its ok, but the instant kinkiness and stuff was "whoa hang on life changing shit happened let's grope."
It's always tough to write a convincing romance or whatever, but having the characters say "my love" at times, for some reason just seems awkward when I read it, even though I say it to my own sweetheart and she says it back. That's not a complaint as more an observation on HP fics as a whole.
The story started very strong, but the ending scene got kinda wonky, probably from the dramatic change. But you had a strong conclusion.
I liked reading this all the same.